"When is a story good"

"When is a story good"

1.Be logical: a story should make sense

2.Introduction: Needs to catch your attention and make you want to keep reading to find out what happens.

3.Imagination: Being creative makes it more interesting to read, and more engaging.

4.Creative: Should be something new that makes story more interested and different

5.Creative body could make readers not loose their interests in your story

6.When it is made for the reader to understand. Target audience.

7.Has a good hook in the beginning

8.Clear and intresting ending

9.Transition from one point to another

10.Grammar and Structure

11.Conclusion that summarizes main points of the story

12.Using good resources to find legit information.

13.Put facts from least to most important.

14.Attractive clues that makes you want to read more.

15.Pace: How fast the story moves shouldn't be to fast or to slow

16.Emotion: The ability to connect to the emotions of what is happening

17.Mystery: don't make the topic be extremely obvious. allow the reader to actually think about it and try to figure things out for themselves.

18.Good choice of words but has to make sense

19.Personalized stories with your own words and ideas are more meaningful and interesting

Hacker review of clear sentences

Hacker review of clear sentences

E-ex 8-1 Active vs. passive verbs

I learned the difference between active and passive verbs.

E-ex 8-2 Active vs. be verbs

I have already know them well.

E-ex 8-3 Active verbs  (edit and compare)

I learned when I need to use active verbs in sentences.

E-ex 9-1 Parallelism

I learned how to write better sentences.

E-ex 9-2 Parallelism

This is same as E-ex 9-1.

E-ex 9-3 Parallelism  (edit and compare)
It's useful for me to learn more about parallelism.

E-ex 10-1 Needed words

I have knew a lot about this topic.

E-ex 10-2 Needed words  (edit and compare)

I learned how to use some meaning less words in sentences.

E-ex 11-1 Mixed constructions

I learned the order and phrasing of sentences.


E-ex 11-2 Mixed constructions  (edit and compare)

I learned how to add some words in sentences.


E-ex 12-1 Misplaced modifiers
I think it's useful for me.

E-ex 12-2 Misplaced modifiers  (edit and compare)

I learned how to clear sentences.


E-ex 12-3 Dangling modifiers

I learned how to use modifiers in sentences.

E-ex 12-4 Dangling modifiers  (edit and compare)

I learned more about the dangling modifiers.


E-ex 13-1 Shifts: person and number
I have already understood.

E-ex 13-2 Shifts: tense

I have learned before.

E-ex 13-3 Shifts

I have already understood shifts. 

E-ex 13-4 Shifts  (edit and compare)
This is more helpful than previous three part.

E-ex 14-1 Choppy sentences

It helps me a lot.

E-ex 14-2 Choppy sentences  (edit and compare)

This is same as E-ex 14-1.

E-ex 14-3 Subordination

I think it's a easy part, but still very useful for me.

Grammar Topic: Needed Words

Grammar Topic: Needed Words

Group 3: Joseph Reece, Nicholas S, Hao Xu.

Words needed are not always clear. When writing about a topic we tend get wordy and over-write or miss subtle differences that may confuse the reader. Here are a few examples:

Ex 1:

Original: Patrick O’Brian’s novels contain more accurate information about naval history than any other author.

Proper: Patrick O’Brian’s novels contain more accurate information about naval history than any other author's books.

In the original sentence the reader may confuse comparing Patrick's novels to other authors instead of other author's books.

Ex 2:

Original: The man whom we encountered at the airport turned out to be a long lost friend.

Proper: The man we encountered at the airport turned out to be a long lost friend.



The word whom is not crucial to understanding the sentence and therefore can be omitted.


Summary:

If a word does not affect the meaning or interpretation of the sentence than it can usually be omitted. Sometimes an "extra" word or two may be necessary to distinguish what is being referred to or compared in the sentence.When choosing words make sure they are needed in your sentence, not just placeholders.







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who am I

who am I

          At the first day, the teacher let us to describe ourselves and give stuents a topic "who am I".  About this question "who am I", students may get many different kins of answers such as name, age and job......Mnay students have similar ansewrs like these.  Others gave more information about the family and friends.  Maybe students will be confused about the question "who am I".   In my opinion, it's better to answer this question in that you did before and what the goal in the future.

story in the box

Story in the box

          A few years ago, there is a beautiful village at the foot of a mountain in China.  In this small village, a young boy called Jack lives here.  He is actively and he has a dream of traveling the world.  He made the plan and decided to achieve his dream after a few days.  Before he leaving, he prepared some food, some clothes and a lot of special things such as: a jade stamp, a silk blanket and a wooden yellow ruler.

          During Jack's trip, he first arrived in Singapore.  He was amazing of the beauty of the environment.  When he went to the shop, he found the special coins.  There are some delicate animals on the coins and Jack likes it very much.  He exchanged with the shopkeeper and put them into his wallet.  After he leaving the Singapore, he reached India.   Luckily, he met a monk.  During his time in  India, Jack learned a lot about the Buddhist scriptures.  When Jack leaving the India, Jack gave the monk the silk blanket as a present.  In return, the monk gave him a statue of a monk head.  It's made from wood.  Afterwords, he travels to Europe.  He saw a different kind of farming there.  He learned a new Spanish word called "Finca".  It is a kind of a Spanish farm. Before Jack leave there, the farmer gave him some chestnuts.  Then, he travel to the Africa by a small boat.  According to enjoy the life there, Jack felt the colorful word.  Before he leaving Africa, Jack use the Chinese  jade stamp to exchange for a statue of a black woman and a model of a entertainer.  These two things are all the symbol of the local people.  Jack would collect them very cautiously.

          Finally, Jack stepped on his way back to the village.  He brings back a lot of special presents.  He finished his dream and lives more felicity.

Inventory list

Inventory list

wallet: a wallet with a picture of animals on it.

coin: several coins are used for collecting and they are from Singapore.

ruler: a yellow ruler used to measure length in inches.

chestnuts: 3 black chestnuts with different sizes.


cloth: these clothes may have been made for 200 years.

head: it is a woman head with no hair and it made up by wooden.


boat: a old boat and it made by wood.

blanket: a beautiful black blanket with some flowers on it.


statue: it is a statue of a black woman. She is bald but very tall.

model: a model of a entertainer who is beating a drum.

stamp: this is a Chinese jade stamp with a Chinese character on the bottom of the stamp.

jar: a small jar with a cover on it.

finca: finca is a spanish word and it means farm.

What makes a story good?

Group 3: Joseph Reece, Nicholas S, Hao Xu.

What makes a story good?

Spelling, grammar, and punctuation must be accurate and correct for a story to be readable.

There should a main focus whether it is an object or a character.

A story should be organized and have a logical order of events.

Semantics should be varied and a large vocabulary should be used.

It should use dialogue sparingly and strategically.

It needs to contain sensory details, painting a picture for the mind of the reader.

There should be a climax as well as twists in the plot to keep the reader guessing.

A story should have a purpose or a theme.

The story should flow well and use transitions wisely when necessary.

It should display interest on the part of the author.

The author should be credible and have basic working knowledge of what they talk about in their story.

It should be readily accessible by the intended audience and be in their native language.

The ending should provoke thought or give new information the reader has heard before.

It should have good usage of literary devices such as: metaphors, similes, alliteration, and personification.